Julie lay silently, her skin swimming in a pale blue light, as if death had visited her and left its mark. If it weren't for her slow, shallow breathing, Eli would have sworn she had died.
"Julie." The name was just a whisper on his lips, but it was enough. Her eyelids fluttered and opened.
"Eli? Are you here?"
w00t! On the 42k!! Now that's some great wordage. :) Love the snippet, sounds like it's going well. Keep up with the great writing!
ReplyDeleteThanks! Hoping I can hit the keyboard in a few minutes...
ReplyDelete'her skin swimming in a pale blue light, as if death had visited her and left its mark.' I LOVE this line :)
ReplyDeleteWell done on the word count! And thanks for following my blog, much appreciated!
Ooooh, the Phoenix sounds really good, I liked the excerpt too. Thanks for finding me and best wishes on the story!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Andrea and Laura! Working on this has been both exhilarating and challenging. Hit 46K today. I'm hoping to get this finished within the next couple of weeks. Thanks for following!
ReplyDeleteHi Bette, Thanks for the follow. I just found your blog:) Inpressed that you're working 2 MS's at the same time. I was trying the draft one and revise the other, but it was too confusing (switching from 1st person present to 3rd person past) besides the storyline. Anyhow, glad to start getting to know you. Good luck on your MSS and way to hit 42K!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Robin! I actually just hit 61K. Had to put off writing while I was job hunting, which, thank God, was a successful venture! See my latest post for a new snippet!
Delete